سلام انا خانم عزیز.
خب بریم سر اصل موضوع .اصلا عالی عالی عالی عالی بودید.این از تعریف.خخخ
زمان حال ساده رو گوش کردم به خاطر عجله داستانگویی ضعیف بود.باید رو نحوه داستان گویی کار کنید بیشتر.
Successful و give رو در اخر ویس اشتباه تلفظ کردید. تا اخر هفته وقت داری که احساساتت رو در داستان بگنجونی.
پس دیگه عجله نکن.
داستانهای بعدی رو همگوش میکنم و تو همین مست فید بک میدم
دوباره سلام انا خانوم.دو ویس دیگه هم گوش کردم.
تلفظ will رو دقت کنید چون اشتباست.
بعضی جاها هم زمانیکه دو کلمه به هممیرسن نمیتونید کلمه دوم رو واضح تلفظ کنید.البته اینمشکل رو همه دارن چون گفتم فیدبک تخصصی این دو رو گفتم.
باشه بیشتر احساس به خرج میدم
دوتا کارکتر قبلی داستان های ای جی دخترای بیوتیفول بودن خیلی بهتر بود این یکی عنکبوت بود من از عنکبوت خوشم نمیاد
آخر هفته داستانو عوض میکنم و با احساس تعریف میکنم
Where there is desire, there is gonna be a flame
Where there is a flame, someone’s bound to get burned
But just because it burns, doesn’t mean you’re gonna die
You gotta get up and try, and try, and try
عه ، یه آهنگ هم با همین نام listen یادم اومد
میگه :
Listen, I am alone at a crossroads
I’m not at home in my own home
And I’ve tried and tried
To say what’s on my mind
You should have known
Now I’m done believing you
You don’t know what I’m feeling
I’m more than what
You’ve made of me
I followed the voice, you gave to me
But now I’ve gotta find my own
You should have listened
Elvis is a spider. It’s weird, isn’t it? I think it’s weird. A Spider has a name. Anyway, Elvis is a spider and he has eight legs. He has a problem. Again weird. What kind of problem does a spider have? As far as I know, he can’t swim. Of course this is not weird. No spider can Swim. But As you may know Elvis is not a normal spider. He doesn’t want to be like the other spiders. He wants to be unique, and he wants to learn how to swim. Elvis lives in London. Yeah, he is a British spider. No wonder he is weird. He is as weird as British accent. Elvis has a goal. Can you believe it? He is a spider and he has a goal. Why don’t you have a goal? Shame on you. Look at Elvis and look at yourself.
Anyhow Elvis wants to swim from London to New York city across the Atlantic Ocean. It’s freaking mad. Oh poor Elvis. Does he make it possible? Does he die? I don’t Know. Maybe, maybe not. We’ll see soon. He decides to practice. He chooses the North Sea as a training pool. You can probably imagine how it’s cold in the North Sea. Elvis freezes. He’s going to die. Actually he almost drowns. So he lets go about the North sea. He decides to do the right thing and he goes to the gym. He practices there every day. Every day while practicing in the pool he pictures New York city in his mind.
He imagines it very clearly and vividly in his brain. Finally the moment of truth comes. He stands on the edge of the Atlantic ocean, takes a deep breath and dives into the ocean. He starts swimming madly toward New York city. While swimming in the ocean, he goes through loads of trouble. Sharks want to eat him up but he hits them with his legs. He thinks “, Finally these legs came in handy”. He undergoes storms, bad weather, rain, but none of them can disappoint him, he doesn’t give up. Because he has a goal. A vivid and certain goal. After a long time swimming, he arrives in New York city and his journey is finished. He has done it. He feels wonderful. He has achieved his goal. Because of his Success, the mayor of New York city gives him the key to the city. There is a big parade for Elvis to celebrate his success all over the city. Now Elvis is a famous and rich spider. He decides to stay in New York and live there forever.