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Plz correct me about introduce my self

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#1

سلام و وقت به خیر
ممنون میشم برای دوستانی که امکانش هست، در متن زیر اشتباهاتم را بفرماییند.

I want to introduce me for you.
Pleaze correct me if i make a mistake or suggest better sentence.( tanks a lot)

I’m fateme jafari,
i’m 33 years old.
I live in tehran.
I completed my bachelor in software enginnering from shahrood university and
i graduated from science and information university in master in software enginnering major.
Now I work in a office and i’m in charg of my unit. I manage our projects and control my collegs. Our projects almost are about make security in ecommerce by using digital certificate.

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#2

First I’d like to thank you for being brave enough to post a writing of your own and asking other people to correct it. :sunflower:

Here are some suggestions to make it better:

*.introduce myself to you…
*Please
*I (always write it capitalised when you want to use it as a pronoun)
*suggest better sentences…
*thanks
*Fatemeh Jafari (always capitalise the first letter of the name and the surname)
(Also, the ‘h’ I put at the end of ‘Fatemeh’ is just a matter of preference)
*Tehran (capitalise the first letter of the names)
*bachelor’s degree (just prefrence)
*…Shahrood University…
*I finished my master’s degree in software engineering from science and information university
*…work in an office…
*…I’m in charge of my…
*…supervise my colleagues…

  • Our projects are just about providing security in ecommerce by using (a?) digital certificate
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#3

Thank you so much kind girl⚘

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